Comments on: Ad Copy Mistake http://www.makemoremoneyonline.com/2008/11/12/ad-copy-mistake/ Make More Money Online Wed, 18 Nov 2009 17:20:28 -0600 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.8 hourly 1 By: Chris Grayson http://www.makemoremoneyonline.com/2008/11/12/ad-copy-mistake/comment-page-1/#comment-66 Chris Grayson Thu, 13 Nov 2008 21:16:00 +0000 http://www.makemoremoneyonline.com/2008/11/12/ad-copy-mistake/#comment-66 No video to watch early in the ad copy. A lot of people aren't going to read all the info you wrote. They're just going to go right to the cost. No video to watch early in the ad copy. A lot of people aren’t going to read all the info you wrote. They’re just going to go right to the cost.

]]> By: MakeMoreMoneyOnline.com http://www.makemoremoneyonline.com/2008/11/12/ad-copy-mistake/comment-page-1/#comment-65 MakeMoreMoneyOnline.com Thu, 13 Nov 2008 14:05:00 +0000 http://www.makemoremoneyonline.com/2008/11/12/ad-copy-mistake/#comment-65 First, I want to say thanks to everyone...great feedback, and I'll be implementing many changes.<br/><br/>I owe you all a big favor!<br/><br/>But we only have one winner...its something that has been said by only person so far...<br/><br/>And I'll be announcing our winner this afternoon.<br/><br/>Thanks again!<br/><br/>Craig First, I want to say thanks to everyone…great feedback, and I’ll be implementing many changes.

I owe you all a big favor!

But we only have one winner…its something that has been said by only person so far…

And I’ll be announcing our winner this afternoon.

Thanks again!

Craig

]]> By: The Well-Medic http://www.makemoremoneyonline.com/2008/11/12/ad-copy-mistake/comment-page-1/#comment-64 The Well-Medic Thu, 13 Nov 2008 13:35:00 +0000 http://www.makemoremoneyonline.com/2008/11/12/ad-copy-mistake/#comment-64 did not see an opt-in/drop-in box to collect visitor info and offer free stuff to show them the value of your program. "Move the free line" isn't that the new mantra? Also avideo demo/testimonials adds to the social proof. did not see an opt-in/drop-in box to collect visitor info and offer free stuff to show them the value of your program. “Move the free line” isn’t that the new mantra? Also avideo demo/testimonials adds to the social proof.

]]> By: Claire http://www.makemoremoneyonline.com/2008/11/12/ad-copy-mistake/comment-page-1/#comment-63 Claire Thu, 13 Nov 2008 09:57:00 +0000 http://www.makemoremoneyonline.com/2008/11/12/ad-copy-mistake/#comment-63 Despatch time is too long....after reading all the text which takes ages, it is quite irritating to find out despatch to the U.K. is 6-8 weeks when you want to be looking gorgeous by Christmas!<br/><br/>Claire Keenan Despatch time is too long….after reading all the text which takes ages, it is quite irritating to find out despatch to the U.K. is 6-8 weeks when you want to be looking gorgeous by Christmas!

Claire Keenan

]]> By: Caroline Radway http://www.makemoremoneyonline.com/2008/11/12/ad-copy-mistake/comment-page-1/#comment-62 Caroline Radway Thu, 13 Nov 2008 07:47:00 +0000 http://www.makemoremoneyonline.com/2008/11/12/ad-copy-mistake/#comment-62 Got here a bit late so nothing new to add, but my initial thoughts were no social proof / credible before & afters with full names / occupations (and all the guys pictured look like fellow pros), too much prose - not broken up enough (i'm a skimmer so read the yellow highlighted stuff!) and no 'trailer'...<br/><br/>Caroline<br/><br/>http://www.kettlebellebody.com<br/>http://kettlebellebody.blogspot.com Got here a bit late so nothing new to add, but my initial thoughts were no social proof / credible before & afters with full names / occupations (and all the guys pictured look like fellow pros), too much prose – not broken up enough (i'm a skimmer so read the yellow highlighted stuff!) and no 'trailer'…

Caroline

http://www.kettlebellebody.com
http://kettlebellebody.blogspot.com

]]> By: Bryan kavanagh http://www.makemoremoneyonline.com/2008/11/12/ad-copy-mistake/comment-page-1/#comment-61 Bryan kavanagh Thu, 13 Nov 2008 03:23:00 +0000 http://www.makemoremoneyonline.com/2008/11/12/ad-copy-mistake/#comment-61 Hey Craig!<br/><br/>I thought it wasa great site! but then i saw something i dont know if its wrong or right as i dont have much experience but it think the line<br/><br/>(Plus, you'll receive the workout - for FREE - that helped more than 5,533 men and women lose up to 41 pounds of fat in just 8 weeks)<br/><br/>is bonus material and it is mentioned too early in the copy?<br/>should it not be later in a PS? i dunno just an idea. . i was gonna say the before and after pictures myself but that one was taken :-)<br/><br/>errrmmm. . . <br/><br/>telling them its not their fault?. . shouldnt they accept responsibility for their actions blabla. . (i know hitting the sore spot etc) ah im out ill have another look <br/><br/>Bryan Hey Craig!

I thought it wasa great site! but then i saw something i dont know if its wrong or right as i dont have much experience but it think the line

(Plus, you’ll receive the workout – for FREE – that helped more than 5,533 men and women lose up to 41 pounds of fat in just 8 weeks)

is bonus material and it is mentioned too early in the copy?
should it not be later in a PS? i dunno just an idea. . i was gonna say the before and after pictures myself but that one was taken :-)

errrmmm. . .

telling them its not their fault?. . shouldnt they accept responsibility for their actions blabla. . (i know hitting the sore spot etc) ah im out ill have another look

Bryan

]]> By: Jeremy and Alissa Nelms http://www.makemoremoneyonline.com/2008/11/12/ad-copy-mistake/comment-page-1/#comment-60 Jeremy and Alissa Nelms Thu, 13 Nov 2008 02:22:00 +0000 http://www.makemoremoneyonline.com/2008/11/12/ad-copy-mistake/#comment-60 A few other things:<br/><br/>1) Very few before/after (or ANY) photos on the testimonials.<br/>2) No city, state, and/or profession for the testimonial people<br/>3) No "preview" image of the Clickbank shopping cart page, so they know it's "ok" that they have left your site.<br/>4) No Web 2.0 link (Digg, StumbleUpon, Technorati, etc.)<br/>5) No multiple-payment program option.<br/>6) No trial-offer option.<br/>7) No downsell or special offer upon exiting the page.<br/><br/>Jeremy Nelms<br/><a HREF="http://www.NoExcusesFatLoss.com" REL="nofollow">No Excuses Fat Loss!</a> A few other things:

1) Very few before/after (or ANY) photos on the testimonials.
2) No city, state, and/or profession for the testimonial people
3) No “preview” image of the Clickbank shopping cart page, so they know it’s “ok” that they have left your site.
4) No Web 2.0 link (Digg, StumbleUpon, Technorati, etc.)
5) No multiple-payment program option.
6) No trial-offer option.
7) No downsell or special offer upon exiting the page.

Jeremy Nelms
No Excuses Fat Loss!

]]> By: Dr. George Burroughs http://www.makemoremoneyonline.com/2008/11/12/ad-copy-mistake/comment-page-1/#comment-59 Dr. George Burroughs Thu, 13 Nov 2008 02:20:00 +0000 http://www.makemoremoneyonline.com/2008/11/12/ad-copy-mistake/#comment-59 I know that I am not the first, but as I read it, I noticed two things: First, there was no opportunity to ORDER until very far down the page. Second, there was no opt-in box for those newcomers who may not be ready to purchase but would be great for an Auto-Responder sequence. I know that I am not the first, but as I read it, I noticed two things: First, there was no opportunity to ORDER until very far down the page. Second, there was no opt-in box for those newcomers who may not be ready to purchase but would be great for an Auto-Responder sequence.

]]> By: Evolving Publishing http://www.makemoremoneyonline.com/2008/11/12/ad-copy-mistake/comment-page-1/#comment-58 Evolving Publishing Thu, 13 Nov 2008 02:03:00 +0000 http://www.makemoremoneyonline.com/2008/11/12/ad-copy-mistake/#comment-58 On top of some of the things that others have mentioned (opt-in pop up, order buttons, upsell) I didn't see any before/after pictures or social proof of the program. Also a lot of testimonials without pictures.<br/><br/>About the videos... I don't see any clips about them on the page. On top of some of the things that others have mentioned (opt-in pop up, order buttons, upsell) I didn’t see any before/after pictures or social proof of the program. Also a lot of testimonials without pictures.

About the videos… I don’t see any clips about them on the page.

]]> By: Ricardo O. Irizarry NSCA-CPT, CSCS http://www.makemoremoneyonline.com/2008/11/12/ad-copy-mistake/comment-page-1/#comment-57 Ricardo O. Irizarry NSCA-CPT, CSCS Thu, 13 Nov 2008 01:43:00 +0000 http://www.makemoremoneyonline.com/2008/11/12/ad-copy-mistake/#comment-57 I don't know if anyone said this but I know that the big mistake you did was:<br/><br/>Not to show a sample video of what you were selling. <br/><br/>Your customers know you have youtube videos. Is that what you are selling? A compilation of youtube videos?<br/><br/>If people see a sample video of what they are getting they don't have to read the sales copy because they know you offer quality.<br/><br/>Definitely a Video explanation or sample of what they are getting is what you missed. I don’t know if anyone said this but I know that the big mistake you did was:

Not to show a sample video of what you were selling.

Your customers know you have youtube videos. Is that what you are selling? A compilation of youtube videos?

If people see a sample video of what they are getting they don’t have to read the sales copy because they know you offer quality.

Definitely a Video explanation or sample of what they are getting is what you missed.

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